How Important Is The First Sentence?
By - _burgernoid_
It matters a lot, so to avoid readers judging your writing too soon, I would advise that you simply don’t write a first sentence. Start with the second sentence, then they’ll be forced to keep reading.
Not warm and inviting. I would close the book and burn it after reading such drivel.
Best to avoid words like "plague" or "Ye". Are you fully committed to the exclamation marks?
Here, this is how I would rewrite:
Hope that helps. Edited to add quotes around example.
I thought it was a little too intense for the opening of a children’s book, but your suggestion is a better fit.
Maybe add "kind sir" at the end to offset the intensity and confuse the children.
The sentence is interesting, I guess. But it would really sell better with more caps.
WOE! PLAGUE BE UPON YE!
Hmm.. actually not feeling it. Is there a way to add more caps? I’m not sure, I might have to make a post about it and get back to you. (But I probably won’t because I want writing advice but don’t want to follow through with anything.)
# WOE PLAGUE BE UPON YEET
Finally some good fucking literature.
What's the most important a person can write? Always the next one.
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I find it a bit gaudy, perhaps Woe! Pox upon all of Ye!
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