Boring was harsh. Im sure your idea / concept isn’t boring at all! But I will say it’s reading quite slow. This wouldn’t captivate me enough to keep reading this book. Not because your story is boring but because the way you’re writing it is boring. Show us don’t tell us. And I second all the other advice smokeonthehorizon gave to you! Coursera is a wonderful online resource with tons of free writing courses taught by actual universities all throughout the country. I’ve enjoyed some of their creative writing courses!

Thanks for the feedback.

Your sentence construction needs a lot of work. You have a lot of run-on sentences, which leads to a lot of subject-object and verb disagreement, and you bounce back and forth between past tense and present tense. And your dialogue is not properly formatted/punctuated in many spots. I don't understand your character's name. Is it "And" or "Qden?" Either way, seriously rethink this decision. As for the story itself: it's really quite boring when it isn't confusing. You spend so much time describing inconsequential things. This is the start of your book; you need to hook your reader, not give a moment-to-moment play-by-play of every little action, gesture, and thought. I recommend looking up some courses/books/any creative writing instruction. > Who an Earth are you Who *on* Earth. Pay closer attention to your edits.

Thanks for your feedback. I don’t think my story is boring.

If you're writing for an audience, it doesn't much matter what you think.